10-22-2017, 12:05 AM
I like it. Particularly the idea of everyone in this tiny town fighting over the cash. I do think some of the deaths seem a little too dark, like bashing someone's head against the road repeatedly...but that depends largely on presentation. It also depends on what you're going for. A scene like that would be funnier (to me) if she kept groaning after each hit. Kinda like this scene in Me, Myself and Irene (people "borrow" ideas all the time):
Seems you've already gotten some pretty good ideas so far. I'm off the next 2 days, so I'll try to see if I can come up with any funny death ideas.
Seems you've already gotten some pretty good ideas so far. I'm off the next 2 days, so I'll try to see if I can come up with any funny death ideas.

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