05-24-2017, 01:50 PM
(05-24-2017, 01:32 PM)Slythe Wrote: Run on sentences everywhere. I don't want to be an armchair critic; I have no professional experience in journalism. However it's quite apparent he needs some feedback on several facets of his writing style.
He really should work on monitoring his sentence length, crafting smooth transitions between thoughts, not relying so much on confusing figures of speech, and (in general) being more to the point.
He seems like a good guy, and he puts out a lot of content. He just needs to work on some of these fundamentals. Unfortunately it might not be as apparent to him as it is to myself and many others.
Night and day with Hopspin and Dan Hoard.
Hoard does a great job when he writes articles.
